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    dots Submission Name: My Girldots
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    Author: orpheus
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 188/165/57
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsMy Girldots
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    When i look into your eyes i see the universe
    but when you walk away babe, you know it truely hurts
    i'm sick without ya love, feel it, you the nurse
    with the proper medication, this song the dedication
    to every curve of ya body, that dang'rous smile
    there's still no word i can rhyme to explain ya style
    it might take a while, so bare with me
    but if ''in love'' is a place i promise there we'll be

    you're my world {my everything}
    my girl {the light that heaven brings}
    there's nothing in my life that i wanted more
    but now you know that my heart is yours

    twas hard in the beginning, i had to change
    because the clouds surrounding me, poured the blackest rain
    the weather in my life became unpredictable
    but the light of love that you shines unconditional
    you touch the spiritual, the deepest parts of me
    i was blind before i met you but now i start to see
    how life can be, and what love really is
    to think the point of living's something that i nearly missed

    you're my world {my everything}
    my girl {the light that heaven brings}
    there's nothing in my life that i wanted more
    but now you know that my heart is yours




    Submitted on 2007-03-17 06:31:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is Reggae!!!!
    Awesome, [censored] wonderful.

    Fabulous.

    GBG - Leah
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]


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