Sleeping Legs
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This is one of the few linear pieces I write every so often, it does have an overall plot/message. I hope it worked out well, normally no one comments when I actually manage to get something very clear.
Sleeping Legs
You're not awake yet so keep on trying you're almost there but now it's time to go back down again you're not quite breathing yet so cough out your soul, a little now your feet are on the floor and you're looking pretty good wipe off your vile dreams and befriend the modern world the cieling hangs too low for me to grow as high as I've been- trying to go that door looks nice and empty make your way along there's a naked woman standing there with a pretty perfect form crawl along the clothes you've left far too long ago look for her legs to climb yourself upon you make it halfway up to a - kiss on the lips keep on trying, you've passed out again cough out some soul as you start to breathe don't fall down again but there's no one here this time |
Submitted on 2007-03-17 13:48:00 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| It seems almost like memories of someone significant...like you had something special together, something really intimate, and then it suddenly disappeared from your life and you were left alone to try and experience that intimacy by yourself. When really, you can't. I had a little trouble thinking about whether this piece meant what I thought, though. As you stated, no one comments when you actually get something clear. To be perfectly honest, I thought it was clear, but at the same time, I didn't. Help me out. Was I on the right track, or did you mean something completely different from what I thought? ---Restless | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by Raging Rain | [ Reply to This ] | |
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