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WALLS


Author: GoKart Mozart
Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 131 /93 /49
Words: 138
Class/Type: Poetry /What you did
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i dont remember if this was bef-well.....eventually it was goodbye. thank goddess. if it never was goodbye, id still be angry and emo o_0

ok, so i wasnt emo at THAT point in time

well anyway...enjoy


WALLS



I just want you to know
That you’ve crushed me like a bug
Not once did you tell the truth-
YOU TOLD ME IT WAS LOVE!

So why should I believe you now?
You tell me that you’re sorry-
But now that I know who you are,
I don’t have to worry

Here’s our story
No glory
Believe
This is what you did to me

I tried to put up a fight
But you tore down my walls.
I fought back with all my might-
I should’ve kicked you in the…face!

Although I couldn’t see it
There must’ve been another way.
You know what you have done to me
But to others I’ll never say
What happened on that day

There’s no other way
So I’ll just say
Goodbye…
Again…
For good.




Submitted on 2007-03-17 17:29:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hello sweetness. This was good and it portrayed a rather large amount of emotion that I didn't expect. It was a surprise and a good kicker here.



Zach
| Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
  I'll kick 'em in the balls for ya. I thought this was a good write. It came straight from the soul, and that's how poetry should be.
| Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]


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