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pain of the rain...

Author: darkwiccan14
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pain of the rain...

I count the rain,
As it pours down,
It touches my soul,
As you came,
MY heart starts to pound,
This rain gets cold,
So very cold....

Submitted on 2007-03-17 17:54:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i love how it builds up with 'you' coming, and then it stays sad, the cold rain still pouring. amazing
| Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by VampireMaiden | [ Reply to This ]
  cool write different its good to be different captured me anyways keep up the writting, Tyson
| Posted on 2007-04-23 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this is very sentimental, but I just wouldn't ever rhyme pain and rain, its too clichéd
| Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by dawfemme | [ Reply to This ]

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