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    dots Submission Name: Pay Checkdots
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    Author: MornSweetSong
    ASL Info:    21/female/wales
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 110/83/46
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 906
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1354



    Description:
       My boss is a dick who treats me like dirt. This is for him. Enjoy.


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    dotsPay Checkdots
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    How to begin, I've worked faithfully for you for two years.
    We've discussed everything, from future dreams - to fears.
    I turn up on time, never let you down, helped out when I could.
    You're never grateful, and don't thank me when you fucking should.

    You are one seriously ungrateful cunt, fucking dick.
    Shove your illegal wage up your ass, you make me sick.
    Who the fuck else would do the things I do to help out?
    When everyone else fucks up, it is at ME you shout.

    It's not my fault you're married to a nag, you're under the thumb.
    I gave you a lending ear and said nothing, I kept schtum.
    You gave me less than minimum wage, crap hours and days.
    The way you treat me I would not treat slaves.

    Argh, one more brick in the fucking angsty wall.
    I'll dance on your grave when you finally fall.
    That may sound harsh, but you fuck with my head.
    I'll make you scream, till hearing my name is the thing you dread.

    Don't get above yourself fuck features, I know too much.
    Staff without visas, out of date goods, and such.
    Think I am bluffing? just fucking watch me, asshole.
    So apologise nicely before I damn your fucking soul.




    Submitted on 2007-03-17 20:57:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Lol Ive had days like this with my boss...know where youre coming from!! Love the rage xx
    | Posted on 2007-03-18 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
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    | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by Catie O Daniels | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the anger, the passion, the raw emotion behind this but you need to take a step back and let it flow better otherwise it gets choppy and hard to read

    "It's not my fault you're married to a nag, you're under the thumb.
    I gave you a lending ear and said nothing, I kept schtum. "

    When I read that, I pretty much went "Huh?" and had to re-read it again because I was confused.
    maybe more:
    "It isn't my fault you married a nag and you're under the thumb,
    I listened you out and then kept schtum (btw, what does that mean? =p lol)"


    By far, my favorite part was
    "Argh, one more brick in the [censored] angsty wall.
    I'll dance on your grave when you finally fall. "

    i feel that way about a few people. Anyway, sorry bout the crap wages. you're boss seems like a true ass....but wait til he read this. haha
    | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by Catie O Daniels | [ Reply to This ]


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