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    dots Submission Name: I Amdots
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    Author: Shadow_Mirror
    ASL Info:    23/m/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.59 - 54/39/18
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 904
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 647



    Description:
       Ya... this was a silly english assinment, but I enjoyed it and kinda liked how it turned out... hope you peeps enjoyed it!


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    dotsI Amdots
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    I am a dark dreamer.
    I wonder about worlds unknown.
    I listen to sounds unheard.
    I see a shadow light in us all.
    I desire to save us all.
    I am a dark dreamer.

    I pretend to be so brave.
    I feel like my heart is decayed.
    I touch thy heart unseen.
    I worry my decayed touch may spread.
    I shed tears for the hearts that bleed.
    I am a dark dreamer.

    I know of dreams untrue.
    I say words no one knows.
    I dream of lost hopes.
    I try to hold the jewels of my night.
    I hope one day people will understand.
    I am a dark dreamer.




    Submitted on 2007-03-18 03:36:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like it too. i love that line ~
    'I am a dark dreamer'. that sounds so awesome....wish i'd thought of that! lol
    very mysterious piece, much enjoyed!
    michelle xxx
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      this peice was amazing minus one minor flaw, the second line in the second stanza didn't quite fit well with the rest of it it didn't make sense. maybe you meant hearing not hear. just a slight change to that and it'll will improve the entire flow of the poem past that point. keep posting
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by Orcelandrya | [ Reply to This ]


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