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    dots Submission Name: Sneezydots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSneezydots
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    Honey-coated spoon bills
    gloss me a golden reflection.
    Tiny sprinkles; icing-dust pollen;
    tickles my nostrils into a
    flare of flirtatious sensations,
    bursting through the stillness of a hot day,
    like a horn blast.

    Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaahoooooooo!!!

    Bless you.




    Submitted on 2007-03-18 06:16:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I'm not even entirely sure what to say about this. It reminds me how random inspiration is. It's pretty thought provoking. It would be fun to see what people would say if the title didn't reveal what this is based on.

    "flare of flirtatious sensations,"

    I think that was my favorite line, because it was a use of those words where you wouldn't normally come across them.


    I really liked it. It made me smile. Good job.

    ~Venia
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]


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