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    Author: blankscreen
    ASL Info:    22/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 222/196/163
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    Description:
       cant help thinking

    y did this have to happen to me?

    the world gave me a break

    and then took it all back

    dont kno where to go from here

    but of course i never knew

    just the colors that stuck out


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    it's over

    I was always afraid of when it would end
    that happy streak that was once so grand
    sauntering through the days with a smile
    trying to say yay as often as possible

    then it all stopped
    the world stood still
    and broke into a thousand pieces all at once
    I looked up from my textbook pages
    and saw the dark and dreary place around me
    it's like i am kicking and screaming from the inside out
    wishing I could break from these boundaries
    this is real
    and my world of happy fantasy is over
    now comes the realization that nothing is ever worthwhile

    i tried
    but i was too afraid

    now it's over




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      I like how this is put. I can somewhat relate to the sudden relization, and ensuing depression... and just like with you, it happened in class, i was just sitting there, looked up, and just went woah.... i found what i needed to come back out of it though, so (thankfully) i am better now, or it wouldve really been over. Thanks for the read, it hit close to home.

    Guermo
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]
      (it's) over

    I was always afraid of when it would end
    that happy streak that was once so grand
    (sauntering) through the days with a smile
    trying to say yay as often as possible

    then it all stopped
    the world stood still
    and broke into a thousand pieces all at once
    I looked up from my textbook pages
    and saw the dark and dreary place around me
    (it's) like i am kicking and screaming from the inside out
    wishing I could break from these (boundaries)
    this is real
    and my world of happy fantasy is over
    now comes the realization that nothing is ever worthwhile

    i tried
    but i was too afraid

    now (it's) over



    Nothing is ever worthwhile? That must be an incredibly dark place you've sent this one from; from totally hopeful to complete hopelessness. If this is simply a life transition from academia to the workforce (as David suggested), then you've probably blown the problem out of proportion. However, I'm sensing something close to emotional trauma in this post, so there must be a more agoninzing dilemma underlying your words. Divorce? The death of a loved one? The end of a relationship? You haven't left many clues to follow.

    I can only hope something better awaits you on the other side of the abyss.

    Bill.
    | Posted on 2007-03-18 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure exactly how to respond to this piece. At first it seems to be from the point of view of a student who has ended school, happy academia, and is now having to go out into the world. But it seems heavier than that as well, as if there are many more issues at stake.
    At the same time, it can pertain to anyone going on to something they don't quite understand and don't feel they are ready for... or feel that they are stuck into going into. I think anyone can empathize with you here. Those who can't are lucky indeed.
    | Posted on 2007-03-18 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]


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