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    dots Submission Name: Imaginedots
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    Author: blue_pixie_dust
    ASL Info:    16 female
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 42/36/22
    Words: 452
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 118
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    Bytes: 2491



    Description:
       This is a story that I am in the process of writing. I'm not quite sure how to go about, though. I've never actually finished a story, let alone know who to actually write one. I'd be happy to have a critiques and advice anyone would give me. This is just a little that I've written. Let me know what you think.


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    Mr. And Mrs. Michael James Lee has since passed away
    From this world on April 3rd, 1883, due to a riding accident. They were found dead on the spot of their estate,
    Richmond Hollows.

    “Why must everything that I love pass away? Why must everything I hold dear to my heart seem to just slip pass my fingers?”

    Jamie Lee 1883




    Chapter One

    The lonely tombstones of Jamie’s parents were standing with their shadows hitting the dark, cool grass, while Jamie stood in front of them looking down at her mother and father’s grave. The trees around the graveyard were wet and lifeless without any sign of youth. She wished she could speak to her parents one last time. Just one more time, and ask them not to send her awat. For that is what is to be done with her. She is to be sent into the country, to life with a family she has never met before.
    Mr. and Mrs. Robinson . Daniel and Louise Robinson to be exact. Jamie knew nothing about them except that if she must live with them, then she must nanny their three kids; Marie, Kris and Kate. Those girls haunted the nightmares of Jamie’s dreams. What if they hated me? What if they were spoiled, bratty children, and what if I hated them? Such question wandered through her mind as she would tink about the Robinsons.
    She finally knelt before the graves and quietly said a short prayer, “ God, please, please don’t let this family hate me, or I them,’ she prayed,’ I’d rather live with my aunt then not be wanted by the Robinson’s. Bless this family for taking me in, and please let me not be a burden. Amen.” She stood back up and headed toward the chauffer who was awaiting to take her to the Robinson’s estate.
    An estate is exactly what it was. A beautiful mansion with wonderful balconies overlooking the gardens, and roses climbing up the pillars . The walls were overflowing with vines like long tresses. The car came to a stop and the chauffer stepped out of the car while heading toward Jamie’s door. He opened it , Jamie slipped out and gave a long sigh of unbelief. “ Are you sure this is it, James?” She asked doubtingly. “Of course, ma’am,’ he answered, ‘ this is what the directions say; Dorchester Estate.” She gave a long sigh and headed up the long, humongous steps. “ What a huge home!, ‘ she exclaimed while heading up the steps, ‘ do they use the whole home?” “ Yes ma’am. All of it.”




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