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    dots Submission Name: Enter the Sandmandots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsEnter the Sandmandots
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    Orange heat shimmers a vision
    of dusty dissolution.
    Sun dips absolute
    into soothing salty water
    and bathes away the swelter of the day.
    Breezy breath, ushering delicately,
    preludes a moonlit serenade.

    As gold fades, carbon soots the sky black.
    Mother morphs another miracle
    and in the wink of an eye
    a choir of diamond stars twinkle into existence.
    In the spotlight of the moonbeam
    the sandman takes centre stage
    and the dream begins.




    Submitted on 2007-03-18 16:04:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your descriptive mind is on wonderful display in this piece. Again I am without answer as to why over thirty folks have read this piece and felt uncompelled to leave any thoughts on your page. The onset of night certainly lends itself to the introduction of the irresistable sandman.
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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