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    dots Submission Name: Wavessdots
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    Author: Ygi
    ASL Info:    17/m
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 290/149/165
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWavessdots
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    Lips parting like the devil's legs
    she melted and by the time we got there was a mess
    wanting to help but
    at the time I couldn't of cared less
    snails making like the shells they've been
    looking for
    all that I've been finding now are just the
    things I won't remember

    I can't be tricked by the cleaning stains
    or the fires in the skies
    making explosions of light where at first
    I saw none
    and this snow does an impressive job of
    making me want you
    and as it lays you down
    the world spins a little slower
    waves wash from the ocean to our
    midwest little town
    swimming with all the
    corpses we've been rambling on on
    and all about
    they look so lonley now
    and so
    insignificant






    Submitted on 2007-03-18 16:25:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this peice is kinda spaced out... Maybe try to connect a few more things in the first stanza? It jumps around a little too much for my taste. Keep at it though.

    Guermo
    | Posted on 2007-03-18 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]


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