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    dots Submission Name: Waiting For A Questiondots
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    Author: Ensult
    ASL Info:    19/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 115/114/31
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1102
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    Description:
       Everyone has bonded with someone in life and has been there for them. But sometimes you can go under appreciated by being there for them.


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    dotsWaiting For A Questiondots
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    Reaching your hands out to someone
    Offering your care
    Cupping your hands while they pour out their soul
    in despair

    Bonding with them in brotherhood
    Crying their tears
    Allowing your heart to open, letting go of your fears

    Understanding whats said before it comes out
    Their heart going in many directions but remaining in route

    Now your heart is pouring
    And sad to say that you will soon discern
    That no matter where you look
    There will be no hand in return






    Submitted on 2004-06-10 07:07:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one a lot, it's written beautifully. I had a lot of friends like that, and in the end I realized they weren't really my friends at all. You use a lot of good lines and the rhythm fits good. I think I might have to add this to my favorites list. Keep up the good work brother.
    | Posted on 2004-06-10 00:00:00 | by Lil Nick | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely, a wonderful, true story you've told us here at eliteskills, treasure this peice, it is absolute Jenious, (Yes, with a J not a G) I love this one. Its so true what you have portrayed here, letting yourself be involved intheir problems and then having no one there in return, its sad. THank you for bringing this to us. ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-06-10 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]


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