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    dots Submission Name: nobody knows*dots
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    Author: beautiful_lie2
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 3/4/8
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsnobody knows*dots
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    At night this girl
    lies alone in bed
    tormented by the thoughts
    running through her head
    *but nobody knows*

    the pressure builds
    and so does the pain
    as she realizes
    there's nothing left to gain
    *but nobody knows*

    she's tired of pretending
    sick of smiling through the tears
    it's been this way
    all her sixteen years
    *but nobody knows*

    she finds the bottle
    in her parent's room
    the contents hold
    the fate of her doom
    *but nobody knows*

    at night this girl
    dies alone in bead
    no longer tormented
    by the thoughts in her head
    *now everybody knows*




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