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    dots Submission Name: A day in the minddots
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    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 963
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    Bytes: 636



    Description:
       A few thoughts i hope some of you may relate to.


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    dotsA day in the minddots
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    Listen to your thoughts
    Analyze them
    Explain them
    Why am I this way?
    Why arenít they like me?
    Look at them!
    You discuss me

    Crowds of them moving at such a pace
    They have no idea
    You will never understand
    An ant understands more than you

    I forgive them for not knowing
    It would be peaceful
    Would it?
    Growing so tired

    We seek so much to understand so little
    So many paths to choose from
    None wrong, none right just different outcomes
    I can make the right ones
    Walk with me.




    Submitted on 2007-03-19 04:37:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice. I'm speechless. I think I might add this to my favorites. When I read this it seemed like you wonder why people are so happy or I guess the word would be calm? Or so predictable when you don't feel that way at all.
    good work!
    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is amazing. i can totally relate! its like you got inside millions of peoples heads and summed up their feelings in one poem. excellent!!!!
    write on,
    Lanna
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]


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