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    dots Submission Name: Don't Break A Date With Medots

    Author: MornSweetSong
    ASL Info:    21/female/wales
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 110/83/46
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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       An old friend has pissed me off for the final time, so today I say goodbye. In true Leah style.

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    dotsDon't Break A Date With Medots

    That's it - I've had about as much as I can take.
    You're not my friend, idiot, you're a fake.
    How many times have I asked you NOT to break a date?
    If you actually turn up, you're never early and always late.

    Every single time I have needed you, you disappear.
    So I crumble alone - fix myself - than you reappear.
    It doesn't work like that asshole, you should be forever.
    You're never here for me, you're just a fairweather.

    I've had verrucas that give me more support,
    You're little more than a dumb cohort.
    You're full of shit too, lying know it all scumbag,
    Take your STD ridden ass elsewhere, fucking slag.

    This may be pretty low - blasting you online.
    Frankly you've treated me worse, so this is fine.
    Don't call me, text me or contact me, you're not my friend.
    I've discovered the real you - a scabby, infected bell end.

    Submitted on 2007-03-19 07:42:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      LMAO!!!!!!!!!!!! That was gas,you gave him/her a severe dressing down.If they read this i feel sorry for them,itll strike a chord,especially with the STD stuff.On a serious note,Id say to you to give this person a chance,but they've obviously had loads already,so ill just say well done on not being walked on any longer.Im guilty of breaking dates with friends/girlfriends myself,but not to this extent I hope,and always for a reason.Good write,positively beutifull imagery lol and above all,good ranty flow.

    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]
      Hell yeah! I know someone exactly like that. She always tells me she's gonna get me weed and never does. Ain't it bull[censored]? I have a few suggestions to help the flow, though.

    "If you actually turn up, you're never early, always late."

    That's it. Also in the second line of the second stanza "than" should be then. Minor mistakes that make no difference whatsoever. The peom is great either way. But I seriously wish you'd stop reading my mind and saying what I think better than me. Of course reading your stuff is more fun than writing my stuff for some reason. Maybe some of it is because we're doing poetry in class now and it sucks to be forced to write poems, even though I do it all the time. Whatever....

    And weed for all!
    | Posted on 2007-04-12 00:00:00 | by Magic Dragon | [ Reply to This ]

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