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    dots Submission Name: Seeing The News Channeldots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsSeeing The News Channeldots
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    Iíve always been punished,
    For the feelings that feel so right.
    You know? The ones that leave you up,
    Keeping you awake at night,
    Telling you not to forget,
    The way you feel right now,
    And then when you whisper,
    You can only dream out loud,
    I donít mean to seem sarcastic,
    Itís just the way I think,
    Since the deeper blue in me,
    Finds deeper depths to sink,
    So watch the screen, hurry,
    Here comes the clincher,
    Be brave about the violence,
    Let words cut you like scissors,
    Hurry, come watch the screen,
    Shrug and say itís all-okay,
    You canít control the visual rape,
    Itís not in your hands anywayÖ




    Submitted on 2007-03-19 11:26:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Man thats was some good stuff!
    It clicked with me after the first two lines, i can relate with what you say.
    Keep it up!

    Kube.
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Kube | [ Reply to This ]
      da feeling sux when u cant do nanything about it yo. good poem.
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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