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Submission Name:
beach.
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Author:
narcolepsy
ASL Info:
19/F/Pa
Elite Ratio:
3.97 - 129/135/60
Words:
25
Class/Type:
Misc/Happy
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Description:
and so it is. i can't take my eyes off of you.
beach.
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warm sun
and sand
and wonderful.
warm wonderful
in your eyes.
warm sunshine
blankets my shoulders.
warm sand
dancing under my feet.
Submitted on 2007-03-19 11:42:40
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very simple, and terribly easy to relate with. i love the beach and every sensation that comes from it. as i said, this is a simple, stripped down way of saying exactly what you want to say, and it serves its purpose.
ryeker
| Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by
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