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    dots Submission Name: beach.dots
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    Author: narcolepsy
    ASL Info:    19/F/Pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 129/135/60
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Misc/Happy
    Total Views: 953
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    Bytes: 211



    Description:
       and so it is. i can't take my eyes off of you.


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    dotsbeach.dots
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    warm sun
    and sand
    and wonderful.

    warm wonderful
    in your eyes.

    warm sunshine
    blankets my shoulders.

    warm sand
    dancing under my feet.




    Submitted on 2007-03-19 11:42:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very simple, and terribly easy to relate with. i love the beach and every sensation that comes from it. as i said, this is a simple, stripped down way of saying exactly what you want to say, and it serves its purpose.
    ryeker
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by ryeker03 | [ Reply to This ]


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