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    dots Submission Name: Hiddendots
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    Author: PrincessKrisen
    ASL Info:    14/Female/USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 5/5/3
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 728
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 230



    Description:
       This is about a guy who I like but who doesn't even know I exist!


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    dotsHiddendots
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    Does he know?
    Does he want to?

    Will he see?
    Will he want to see?

    Does he feel this way?
    Does he want to feel this way?

    Well I do...
    And I want him to too....




    Submitted on 2007-03-19 12:56:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the idea behind the poem, but I think you can find more ways to express the idea. you don't have to ask the same type of questions. i know it creates a sense of parallelism, but maybe you can put more of your feelings into it and let the audience into your mind/heart so we know more of what's going on. but good first (?) poem :)
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by Keller | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! For your first poem, it was a good job! Except for that one you wrote about me!
    "You smell like rotten cheese!" But, yeah, that's kinda sad, ya know, this whole poem deal! It sounds like your depressed. Are you depressed?
    -AnGeL
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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