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    dots Submission Name: Toilet humourdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsToilet humourdots
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    It's such a rush!

    That feeling of desparation
    coupled with the urgency to burst.
    Leg twisting, foot scuffling,
    that "pull your draws down
    quicker than lightening
    and cannon your fat ass
    onto a suddenly tiny gaping gurgler"
    type moment
    can leave you dribbling in self disgust.

    And such relief can only be
    upstaged by the satisfaction;
    and disbelief,
    of actually panning the bullseye
    with golden tinkling.

    That'll teach you to cross your legs in denial!






    Submitted on 2007-03-19 14:25:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was a very interesting and clever piece Kate.

    I loved the last stanza and the last line! Bravo! Don't take any s&%^

    he he he

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      absolutely love this!


























    wow.
    | Posted on 2007-07-12 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]


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