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    dots Submission Name: I Trieddots
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    Author: lynn marsters
    ASL Info:    20/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49/61/32
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI Trieddots
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    I Tried

    But I'm tired

    I Wanted

    But I've failed

    I Loved

    But I guess I lost

    And I did Try

    But please know I'm tired

    and I've been tired for a long time

    "My belief in his ability to change never changed until he changed."

    And I couldn't try anymore.

    And here I am
    abandoned
    at square one
    and I was the one
    who had to make the choice.







    Submitted on 2007-03-19 15:47:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, i loved the format and how you seemed to echo your own thoughts, i really liked the end

    "And here I am
    abandoned
    at square one
    and I was the one
    who had to make the choice."

    it left me thinking...

    good write,
    carrie
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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