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    dots Submission Name: passagesdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
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    i find myself alone in a wilderness of air
    black eyes the trees teeth have clawed
    and still clouds of insects hover blue above me
    preening for the clever seeds

    the morning began with the nauseating metal birds
    repeatedly collapsing from the sky around me
    dusty seperations from my lovers arms
    and acidic hands to creep the lonely hours

    i watched the windy seconds passing
    eternities in heavy breaths and fingers tensed
    silence over the cacophonous machines entangled
    waiting for some word of fond fancy

    i am speechless in you
    and want only what we've always had
    a spirit of endless wonder in eachothers eyes
    an alembicated perpetuity of passionate ardency

    i am still in the first hours of romance
    the place where thoughtful gestures fold the clues
    darb glances fill the room with watchful eyes
    every movement of your voice an ancient ship

    i am lost in the thick of it
    yet you are so far away and will be farther soon
    captured by the heartless metal birds i've seen today
    carried away to more distant wakings

    new sidewalks to grave your feet for walking
    new atmospheres of trembling fervor
    my holy hands shall hold you always
    cups to sleep on in the spilling night

    Submitted on 2007-03-19 20:31:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yay I see you posted again..we do need some good writers out here! I love your style...but I would like to read some more poetry of yours..

    wonderful wonderful
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderus. it's like don't stop i just want to lay here and read your words. brilliant. 'metal birds' and the 'teeth of trees."

    mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm delightful

    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      nice poem yo.
    | Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]

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