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    dots Submission Name: A Dreamdots
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    Author: Emo Angel
    ASL Info:    15/f/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 17/26/24
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 573
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 848



    Description:
       My brother wrote this.


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    dotsA Dreamdots
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    Night falls, love calls
    I dream about you every night,
    outrageous colors fill my sight,
    red roses in a crystal glass,
    white tablecloth like a holy mass,
    candles- black with a faint light,
    a glowing yellow-orange fire burning bright,
    you are sitting at a dining room table,
    I am standing- ready, willing, and able,
    you stand and start to walk my way,
    I think to myself, "Is this the day?",
    you embrace me ever so warm,
    our shadows bond together in one form,
    a loud noise awakes me, I open my eyes,
    it is morning, and I let out a few long sighs,
    I look forward to when the sun goes down,
    'cause with you in my dreams, I'll never frown.


    Lance Charles Conklin
    2007 Lance Charles Conklin




    Submitted on 2007-03-20 09:25:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Aww I like it. Tell your brother he is a good poet. Its a sweet image and It has a really nice flow. I think breaking up the rhyme a bit wouldnt be a bad idea, sometimes it actually adds to the piece, for example a broken line could symbolize how broken he feels inside.

    Then again its wonderful the way it is. If its really true then I hope some day your brother gets what he always wanted and was waiting for.

    ~flora
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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