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    dots Submission Name: Love/My Lifedots
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    Author: Emo Angel
    ASL Info:    15/f/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 17/26/24
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove/My Lifedots
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    Love is like a river so peaceful and deep,
    You are like a secret I never could keep,
    When I look at you each day I wish it were true,
    That you could see me the way I see you.
    My life is so twisted so gone astray,
    I feel like it crashes more and more each day.
    Why do I live my life the way I do?
    Well God only knows and I hope that is true.
    Why do these feelings I have grow stronger each day?
    Why can't I just make them go away?
    Why do I live my life the way I do?
    Well most people wish that it were not true.
    How can I find a way to reach toward the sky?


    Lance Charles Conklin
    2007 Lance Charles Conklin




    Submitted on 2007-03-20 09:27:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love is the essence of life. Love makes life fragrant. It is embellishment for life. In your poem I feel you have gone paradoxical. You have mentioned Love is peaceful and deep but i feel Love has made your life very turbulent.
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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