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    dots Submission Name: on poetry..... dots

    Author: silentpoison
    ASL Info:    22/F/Teh Shire
    Elite Ratio:    2.67 - 204/259/118
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotson poetry..... dots

    I live my life from day to day
    from pencil or pen
    to paper and page
    an outlet
    plugged into my electricity
    it twists and it bends
    living and bleeding
    it sometimes even bites while its teething

    My heart beats in poetry and prose
    it flows through my body
    From the
    top of my head
    to the
    bottom of my toes
    i also eject words when i sneeze from my nose

    My scars aren't blemishes
    each ones a story
    My steps are sonets
    and i breathe haiku's
    in and out in and
    breathe deep breathe deep breathe deep breathe
    in and out in and

    Its a way to write
    or even to breathe
    its the mouth to the mute
    and fingers for the lame

    Submitted on 2007-03-20 10:07:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    This is exactly how I feel. Writing is the best outlet, and you did a great job with metaphores and whatnot.

    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by FarFromSanityy | [ Reply to This ]

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