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    Author: DAlin
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 82/137/75
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I am the same, you changed I think
    You have now two, not just one drink,
    A feeling down down on the ground
    And smashed across the room...a bond.

    The window slides away from you
    Beside that reason, no undo,
    Ashamed and with no deep reaction
    You wait, in tears...a new invasion.

    Cruel clouds, cruel dreams and cruel desires
    Stoped by a lonely, disturbed fire,
    A young life lost into the night
    Another army lost a fight.

    Screaming for a long lost hope
    Looking for a new cool shadow
    You find yourself floating across...
    ...eternity, you lost your meadow.






    Submitted on 2007-03-20 11:29:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its got a nice sad feel to it but seems like youre reaching on some parts. like forcing words in just to make it rhyme.
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by HappyBuddaH | [ Reply to This ]


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