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    dots Submission Name: the tireless wait of things yet to commencedots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
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       Just fucking waiting to go to Illinois


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    dotsthe tireless wait of things yet to commencedots
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    Lord what am i waiting for?
    when everything falls away,
    dealing with my decisions
    as another season quickly frays
    and it seems so far, but nonetheless
    lost in the frame of now and then

    sit alone and talk to myself,
    trying to assure the lost half
    and guide him to the light
    through this tunnel of darkness
    " you'll get there in due time"
    I'm sick of hearing that line

    " gimme danger little stranger"*
    I have to feel the rush of it
    and feel the blade a little closer
    as i run my tongue across it
    the sweetness of the pain
    lost in the darkness once again

    these hands ache, my pulse ragged
    feels like a cage, with all the openings
    but everything standing in the way
    for lack of better words
    it's always been this way
    for it's the time to get going
    Lord half the problem is knowing

    my hair grows longer, the glares sharper
    and although my gut remains small
    the angst and fury within grow larger still
    waiting for the day where it all subsides
    and i can get off the train in peace
    and walk away with the slightest of ease

    commence to burn my insides
    trying to find a solution to problems
    but i'll sit here and silence
    let my axe do all the talking






    Submitted on 2007-03-20 16:52:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dont worry mannn the more u wait the more fuel you will have to put on an awsome show.

    I digg the end about the axe doing the talking. no talk more action.


    peace
    Aylin
    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      loveing every thing except the axe. so not my weapon of choice. but ohter than that it gave me chills. wicked good write...what's in illinoise? if i may ask.

    "" gimme danger little stranger"*
    I have to feel the rush of it
    and feel the blade a little closer
    as i run my tongue across it
    the sweetness of the pain
    lost in the darkness once again"

    wicked good

    shadow for now
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooooooo I feel drunk with this little rant. It's descriptive in the ways that somone choaks you and you need to look in their eyes before you die.
    It slashes you down right to a human way of thinking, a lost mind just sitting and waiting. I can see this not being spoken but crafted on nothing but pure thoughts.

    I love this.


    - Cynyster Cyanide
    | Posted on 2007-03-20 00:00:00 | by Black-Wall | [ Reply to This ]


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