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    dots Submission Name: Crying Blood---Seeing Reddots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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    dotsCrying Blood---Seeing Reddots
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    you're sitting there,
    waiting for and answer.

    chlostrophobic mind,
    waiting for the right time,

    to say good-bye--
    wondering if i will survive.

    i want you to know,
    i'm gunna go,

    and cry the blood from my eyes,
    wash away all the lies.

    you told me everything will be fine,
    but i noticed it won't be this time.




    Submitted on 2007-03-20 18:31:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this one more, i think. it was short and sweet, and i liked the two sentence lines. they reminded me of sound bites or something. anyway, i really liked 'chlostrophobic mind'. good job!
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]
      this sounds like you having to leave your one true love. (i cry for you :( talk to you later.

    <3 black rose
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      humm....sounds like a bad relationship??? idunno anywayz...i like this also. you are a good writer! keep it up!!

    *kate
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]


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