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    dots Submission Name: Sucess of the Beast Untamed dots
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    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       its another passionate crime, another addition to my sins.....


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    dotsSucess of the Beast Untamed dots
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    Bipolar mind
    A dormant beast
    Waiting
    Yearning to cry out


    Crawling up my skin
    Memories of you
    Sickening thoughts

    Mind shivering from disgust
    The murderer of life
    Oppressing me

    Enchained by your
    Manipulative self

    A reflection of a Utopian hell
    The residue of blood
    Scars I caused

    Healing....

    Hiding....


    Living to conquer
    Surviving for revenge

    I will have your head upon my lap
    Success of the savage untamed

    Can you hear me now?

    I offer you death
    I offer my loving hate

    Creating shadows
    Drugging you with my disease

    You suffer
    And I
    Dying peacefully,
    triumph....





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      whoosh! a lot of bad feelings in this poem...hi ladydeathstrike...i saw that you didnt have a comment for this poem and that intrigued me to read it....Its a really good poem....the only thing is that I was a bit confused with is third stanza..."the murdered life"....I dont quite understand what you meant by that....

    i understand those feelings...like they make you suffer so much that you just want to hurt them back...with ten times the pain....you wonder what you ever did to deserve what they have given you...its such a horrible and wrong relationship...trust me a lot of the times im there....

    i thought the poem was very much andrea.....one of the things in common with your poems is that they are dramatic....i dont mean that in a bad way...its just that i can imagine the stanzas being reiterated in a stage....with the actress truly emiting the right emotional cues....

    great poem. bravo!
    | Posted on 2008-10-19 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]


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