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    dots Submission Name: Brink of Lonelinessdots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 788
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1004



    Description:
       Latest song, hope you like it, took me god damn ages to write, lol

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    dotsBrink of Lonelinessdots
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    Many tears have fallen
    My sorrows have begun
    Many promises broken
    You've given me all I can take
    I can't stand this heartache

    You've given me everything
    The pain, the sorrow, the hurt
    I've cried every night
    Just so I can be held in your arms
    And I don't wanna lose you tonight

    -Chorus-
    I've tried to hide it
    The everlasting sadness
    I wanted to love you
    But the despair is painful
    I tried to conceal it
    But I'm on the Brink of Loneliness

    Your eyes are killing me
    Now I feel so hopeless
    I try not to hurt you
    And your making it painful
    And your kiss leaves me breathless

    -Chorus-
    I've tried to hide it
    The everlasting sadness
    I wanted to love you
    But the despair is painful
    I tried to conceal it
    But I'm on the Brink of Loneliness




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