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    dots Submission Name: Would You?dots
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    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsWould You?dots
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    If I told you I still loved you,
    And was wrong to let you go.
    Would you say you love me too,
    But could never let it show?

    If I grabbed your hand in mine,
    And gave you a kiss to set you free.
    Would you say that it was fine,
    Or turn around and flee?

    If I gave my heart to you,
    And promised to never leave again.
    Would you believe my love was true,
    And let your anger end?

    If I said you're the only one I need,
    And into my love you'd fall.
    Would you hug me 'til I couldn't breathe,
    And answer me final call?




    Submitted on 2007-03-21 08:11:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ur spelling is kidna off, but that's minor. probably jsut a typo. your 3rd stanza was a little iffy, but i liked this. great write.
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolute.
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      That is really good but check your spelling. :P
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by bigothgurl | [ Reply to This ]


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