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    dots Submission Name: Silk to Sandpaperdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 404
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1365



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    dotsSilk to Sandpaperdots
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    Left and lost,
    Completely distraught,
    But we find remedies,
    Soft thoughts,
    To the sweet memories,

    You were the best ever bad,
    Influence I ever had,
    With you, I was never sad,
    But wed leave that behind,
    Wed live and then wed find,
    We believed and loved- it proved to be,
    I always loved the way,
    You love me,

    Left and lost,
    Completely distraught,
    But we find remedies,
    Soft thoughts,
    To the sweet memories,

    Caught up in the complications,
    Of our sinful actions,
    But still like an infatuation,
    An unforgettable passion,
    Yes, it was back when, but it was true,
    You used to love the way,
    I loved you,

    Left and lost,
    Completely distraught,
    But we find remedies,
    Soft thoughts,
    To the sweet memories,

    But now you solemnly swear,
    That you dont dare,
    Cool down- just like we could be,
    You solemnly swear,
    That youd dare not care,
    But thats not how it should be,
    So you point me down this road,
    And this way tell me to go,
    And even though you so love me,
    You solemnly swear,
    Not to follow me there,
    But thats not how it should be




    Submitted on 2007-03-21 09:33:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sweet poem. its.. yaehhh its good.

    the wording is what deadbell said Lovely

    yeahh

    laterrrrrrrrr
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      That was cool.It flowed fast and sharp at times "You were the best ever bad,
    Influence I ever had,". I also like the repetition of those five lines,it was lovely!

    Dead Bell
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by Dead Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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