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    dots Submission Name: A wet dream(pervert)dots
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    Author: red passion
    ASL Info:    15/m/Lost in my mind(KY)
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 117/291/81
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 971
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    Description:
       Perverted wet dream, fantasy.


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    dotsA wet dream(pervert)dots
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    I want you here now;
    Rubbing me gently with your hand.
    Dig your nails in my back,
    so rough, I couldn't stand.
    Your black hair hung in my face.
    That pleasure I couldn't erase.
    You kiss me from mouth to neck.

    Drag me down, so close
    to you on your bed.
    Let the sweat drip down
    like those things you said
    "Do me lance, it's what you should."
    "Come on Lance, fuck me good."
    You open your legs.

    I unzip my pants;
    Pull out my dick.
    You suck it so long;
    It makes you sick.
    I stick it in your cunt
    and you make a small grunt.
    "oh, oh, oh" and you scream.

    This feeling is so wonderful
    as our bodies met.
    I'm building it up for you;
    This substance so slimy and wet.
    You scream" I want it all inside me Lance!"
    "Cum inside me, nows your chance!"
    I did what she told me to do.




    Submitted on 2007-03-21 10:24:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think you were trying WAY too hard to be obscene, it's juvenile and crude.Theres no poetry here. You could make this a great poem, but after the first two lines the shock value wears off and it's just boring. Sex...ain't so poetic when you put it like this.
    | Posted on 2007-03-29 00:00:00 | by Waywarddaughter | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude. You're one sick bas*ard. I love it.

    The Bird
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha. Dude, we're reading this right now in class and its funny as hell. I love it dude. Its freaking great.


    Zach
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]


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