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Childhood


Author: clovernfoxglove
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Childhood



Masters of the Circus Ring,
the holders of a golden key
the enigmatic
smiling face
of clowns and elephants
in the smoke and the haze.

Crispness of October air
the hailing of the Mirrors snares
a hiding reflection in panes of glass
reflections
reflections
of too much time passed.




Submitted on 2007-03-21 10:48:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i see an allusion to the circus...all the colors, the fun, the clowns..but i see it related to fall. and i see fall mirrored to life...

the speaker in his or her october...

life waning...and the wish is that we wish it to last longer...the reflections repeated three times...gives me that idea that when we get older our life becomes so much that that sometimes we don't enjoy enough each day we have left...we just keep looking back to when the leaves were green...but they are pretty in october..and the golden years can be that too.

like this much.


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| Posted on 2011-06-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  Clover, I guess what I have for you here is a suggestion on form. Is it possible, in the second stanza, to shift the third line to the fith position? I think, since you are talking about mirrors, if the two stanzas mirror each others form, as well as devide visually, long line/long line, short line.. short line long line long line... it might make for a very interesting and aesthetic aspect to the poem.
| Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by DavidHirt | [ Reply to This ]
  I haven't been to the circus in years. I'd love to see circe de sole if I'm ever out west. Onto the poem. I like the poem but I would have liked it more if you would have focused more on your childhood rather than the mournful adult reminissing. I know how you feel. I work third shift and I never "live" anymore. Anyway that's my only suggestion. This is the first circus poem I've ever read. I like the way you gave glimpses into the atmosphere without being too specific it made it so that anyone who's ever been to any circus could relate. peace
| Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]


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