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Defeat/ Nynaeve

Author: Nynaeve
ASL Info:    23, female, Israel
Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 43 /67 /28
Words: 45
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Math close, yet so far :D

Defeat/ Nynaeve

Almost reaching surface,
But not quite there.

Sanity tries to take over,
It's yet to ensnare.

My eyes refuse to be opened
Is all that I wish.

Soon the sounds will be broken
And so will I be.

Submitted on 2007-03-21 14:44:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like it.

Keeping it short was a good choice. And it is a very ambigous poem. Bar your caption I would never have guessed it was inspired by maths class:p

The structure makes it really easy to follow too.

Kudos to you.

| Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by Keiran | [ Reply to This ]

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