that is really sad, death is always hard on some people...i know i have lost sevral people..it took me years to get over it..i still get caught up in the emotin that it was mt fault though...everyone has to deal with death sooner or later
it doesnt rhyme very well, but i get the over all emotion of it...
its really sweet that you would write that for your friend
Ouch. Just...ouch. That's one of the most intense emotions in existence, and it's hard to write it well; I can feel it in some parts, but in others--well, put bluntly, you're reaching for rhymes again. I think it could be stronger if you turned it into non-rhyme or maybe used the rhyming dictionary available (it's under Account, bottom of the page, I think.)
Hey. I think of all of them this one is my favourite. The tone of it was a little bit mixed, I don't know if you meant to do this or not, but either way I liked how it showed different angles of emotion and how you were feeling - without being too ridiculously obvious about it. I too really like the line that has previously been quoted... Anyway, this poem definately shows off your potential best. Good job.
Submission Name: He's Gone
