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    dots Submission Name: wet collapsedots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Prose/Passion
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    dotswet collapsedots

    wherever your face ignites my eyes
    there is a nest for silent moments unbound
    heartfelt escapes from the widerness of wasted years
    you are forever saving me from the fog of others
    wrapping lucid fingers round my spine

    in the hollow time, before your hair,
    your skin and your burning mind
    there were only the deserts of space
    i foolishly pretended to twist
    the sand neath by bored feet of feathered glove
    always awonder of the dim evening cloak
    of your arms enveloping me

    future echos i did breathe
    now i am unwound completely
    your legs my castles clutch
    you are the haunting of all my years
    beating sweetly on my neck

    i open to you as flowers do
    an eternity of wet collapse

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      wrapping lucid fingers round my spine...

    wow, that's such an incredible ...wow. such love and devotion, and like ice drawn across skin i melt.


    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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