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    dots Submission Name: the forgetful timedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Prose/Passion
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    dotsthe forgetful timedots
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    the tree of unspeakable life
    waves a nest of thorns
    in its arms

    the winged emerald is my woman's body

    as I write into her
    I lay there
    like the other room
    the sound of water
    coming down
    nearby
    rivers of blue hair
    press my hands
    against her
    a future
    like a kiss reclining
    nude in the orange wind

    in all my fire of human becoming
    I wear the lovely weather
    on my forehead

    I feel the earth breathe
    still, warm
    trees bearded in winter



    the spruce dreams of the palm

    the sage dreams of soft peach


    suddenly she is smiling
    sniping from the gutters
    lilting like angels' trumpets dream
    in a charming corset
    made of poems


    you are as physical as a disease
    I can taste you
    the nude distending
    inside my head
    my crazy bird pointing skyward
    dropping down over the pyramids


    each panoramic second clinks like fresh
    flowers beneath your embroidered skin


    I spill your miracles
    under a rock
    which is where I lay your heart
    to rest




    Submitted on 2007-03-21 19:26:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      not to sound cliché but the hidden figure to whom you write must indeed be lucky, your words are like the wake of a thunder storm still and poised on baited breath clensed and pure unadultered blooms

    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2007-03-21 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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