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Blood


Author: Black-Death
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Words: 68
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Blood



As you lay ontop of me.
Looking into my eyes.
your Hands on my stomake.
My hands tied up.
You dig your nails in deeper into my skin.
Makeing the blood flow out of the cuts.
Makeing me yell out in pain.
Makeing me curse out your name.
Pain surged thro my eyes.
Love surging thro yours.
As you lay ontop of me.
Looking into my eyes.




Submitted on 2007-03-21 22:50:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow!!!! that made me feel a little pain... i like it!
| Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by yamifox | [ Reply to This ]


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