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    dots Submission Name: afternoon touchingdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    dotsafternoon touchingdots
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    and as many hours
    the beauties of traveled sleep
    secret passageways opening into misplaced
    paradises, I came here to meet you

    to say hello,
    to learn what happens when you say
    the word "love" and it gets said back to you
    on bathroom mirrors where the face
    gets blurry and the poem appears.

    no future is worth knowing more than this.
    I stretch out under a blue sky
    and put my hand through it

    until yours touches mine.
    your body reminds me of everything
    it's a slippery universe, the one
    happily ever after I never planned for




    Submitted on 2007-03-21 23:29:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh i know this one, that unexpected happily ever after. the one that makes you're dreams feel real and the color. oh how beautiful. how succinct how dashing. this is so painfully true.

    and as many hours
    the beauties of traveled sleep
    secret passageways opening into misplaced
    paradises, I came here to meet you


    that is heavenly

    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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