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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    this morning i left you sailing under sheets
    soft light intensifying your globe
    delicate weights of air
    brushing my voice across your cheeks

    i am always reminded to relent
    to unnuzzle from your curving knee
    the stacks of springly pretenses
    resting on our heads like love

    i glove inward, palming for your skin
    graceful ravens kiss the sky and dive
    folding silky islands in their eyes
    memories of us back then

    you are forever my lovely folding flesh
    bent in the wind and crawling over me
    so found in the heart of it
    and i am circused by you
    and your clovers wrapped in halcyon air

    you keep teasing me with tigers' paw
    scores of melting fingertips on mine
    eloquent gestures to pass the tiny seconds
    loving gasps like the sly looks of broken clocks

    with you, i'll chime the city breaking

    i once realized the true shape of the sun
    it's the same shape as me
    my love for you is a feather
    rolling up your vivid spine
    a soft truth
    you can pillow while you're dreaming

    to devour a mountain
    one must first become the sky
    and rivers are only as shallow
    as their occupants








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      i see white, and silk, and sunlight, so perfect, like paradise... it' makes me long for greater things and a depth of love i've never felt.

    bravo bravo

    always an admirer
    ~shadow
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