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    dots Submission Name: Just To Say Somethingdots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 904
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    dotsJust To Say Somethingdots
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    I waited for you.
    I cryed for you.
    All the efforts I made didnít matter.

    I kept my promise.
    I did what I said I would.
    But you just canít hold up your end of the deal.

    I waited for you in the rain.
    I cried myself to sleep at night.
    All I wanted was for you to come back to me.

    I took care of the kids.
    I made sure they had all they needed.
    But you still never came back to me.

    You got married again.
    Youíve betrayed us.
    But I still hope in my heart that youíll come back.

    You can say what you will to me.
    Do what you want.
    But you should never lift a childís spirits just to bring them crashing down.

    You stupid man.
    I told you I loved you and you left.
    The kids still havenít realized this yet.

    I know youíre not coming home.
    You break the news to them.
    I canít bare to see another tear.

    Not because of you.
    I wonít stand for it.
    Now be a man and come home.




    Submitted on 2007-03-22 09:58:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very interesting.... i like it but where did you come up with it???? anyway i liked it!!!
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by yamifox | [ Reply to This ]


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