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    dots Submission Name: Universal Timedots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Love,Peace,Joy & Smiles to Share ES

    Spread the Love
    & Do No Harm

    Happy Spring!


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    dotsUniversal Timedots
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    Afloat the meaning
    of the rhyme

    Eight hours forward
    Universal Time

    Adream the beauty
    from the train

    He the seed
    & I the grain

    All vibrancy in
    Love of NOW

    No time passed by
    I knew not how

    And, yet, neither
    standing still

    One Heart, One Love,
    One Will ~*~

    Selah




    Submitted on 2007-03-22 11:40:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      just beautiful Tiff,

    so glad you came by to say hello

    promise I will keep in touch

    love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2011-06-06 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      The rhythm is right on if at the end I allow my mind to extend the last line with a pause for appropriate time. this is more of a sketch I like in depth renderings to bring me into the authors story, the guts and glory. However in this particular poem the rhythm would have been very difficult to do that. peace.
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so timeless and....there are no words. But this is one of my faves.
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a delightful poem, and the rhyming flows like Niagara Falls! You pulled off this poem like a super thief breaks into Fort Knox.

    What really grabbed my attention was the Biblical reference at the end. "Selah" is a word seen in the Psalms many times. It is word that tells the reader to reflect on what was just said. So, in using that word, you have encouraged your readers to look back at what they have just read and meditate on it.

    I'm still trying to find the meaning of the poem. It seems as if someone is travelling a great distance, passing through different time zones, "Eight hours forward, Universal time", in order to visit someone. At first, I thought the person might be a lover, but then when I looked at the line "He the seed, and I the grain", I thought it could be that the person is going to visit their father. At least, that's what I thought.

    Let me know what the story is behind this poem. I am intrigued.
    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      I had to repeat the "Do no harm" motto when I became a nurse....

    I love ur work tiff, cut and dry, long or short, it's the most intriguing work I could possibly read. Thanks for being a great person and a great inspiration.

    love ya,
    shannon
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Very beautiful words that you have here. I wish I could write a bit more like you, you know about happy things, but its kinda hard I have this stuff inside of my head thats constent, and its been that way ever since I've been on this site. But this comment shouldn't be about myself lol. I must be honest, I was confused, this poem was beautiful and all, I guess Im not used to reading the happier bit of poems "closed minded I guess" but what inspired you to write this. Write me back when you get this. Would be apprechiated.
    | Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      Shweet! Somebody find a new love? Whatever you do, however you do it; you still got it and are doing it wonderfully. I'm not gonna sit here and say I wish I could write like you, cause i find it annoying when I'm told that, but it would be nice to have a perspective similar to yours every now and than. Nice to see from anothers eyes peace and love that transends beyond just their words!
    | Posted on 2007-03-26 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Totally beautiful, need I say more; I think not,
    but so you know I am on such a level with this peace; I love it,
    in fact its going in my favs
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to every word you write. You know something, if I close my eyes, I can see myself on a train, going through something very similar to which you describe.

    Now is that not strange !

    A classy write, from a classy lady.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      my comment first!!! yay!!! how is "IT" going in your times???? kind of miss life. seems you still have "IT" fun times



    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2007-03-22 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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