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The Battle That Never Was


Author: iHaveNoName323
ASL Info:    23/M/NC
Elite Ratio:    5.6 - 37 /37 /26
Words: 86
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The Battle That Never Was



The birds regurgitate their food
and fly away
the troops heal
unnaturally arising
back to the center
as swords fly to awaiting hands
with a clash
screams of pain and fury fly back to
the open mouths of the troops
as they begin running backwards
up the hills
the valley is left empty
and the armies sit upon opposite sides
both commanders pace back to their men
invigorating speeches unsaid
as the troops stare
in awaiting anticipation
of the battle to come





Submitted on 2007-03-22 18:19:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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