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    dots Submission Name: The Battle That Never Wasdots
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    Author: iHaveNoName323
    ASL Info:    23/M/NC
    Elite Ratio:    5.6 - 37/37/26
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Battle That Never Wasdots
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    The birds regurgitate their food
    and fly away
    the troops heal
    unnaturally arising
    back to the center
    as swords fly to awaiting hands
    with a clash
    screams of pain and fury fly back to
    the open mouths of the troops
    as they begin running backwards
    up the hills
    the valley is left empty
    and the armies sit upon opposite sides
    both commanders pace back to their men
    invigorating speeches unsaid
    as the troops stare
    in awaiting anticipation
    of the battle to come





    Submitted on 2007-03-22 18:19:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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