The Battle That Never Was

Author: iHaveNoName323 ASL Info:    23/M/NC Elite Ratio:    5.6 - 37 /37 /26 Words: 86

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The Battle That Never Was

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The birds regurgitate their food and fly away the troops heal unnaturally arising back to the center as swords fly to awaiting hands with a clash screams of pain and fury fly back to the open mouths of the troops as they begin running backwards up the hills the valley is left empty and the armies sit upon opposite sides both commanders pace back to their men invigorating speeches unsaid as the troops stare in awaiting anticipation of the battle to come

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