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    dots Submission Name: Burnt Blushdots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 824
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsBurnt Blushdots
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    Open the door
    I need to see your face
    I hear you crying softly
    in the silence of the bathroom
    Talk to me
    only I understand
    you wear pain on your face
    like a terminal child
    Open the door
    and show me your tears
    the heat from your blood
    burns blush on your skin
    Please hear my words
    through the thick of the door
    we'll try again
    the next baby will be born









    Submitted on 2007-03-22 18:33:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i almost thought i would cry when i got the the end of this one. I like how we are kept in suspense right until the very end. We understand the feeling of the poem, and the mood right at the beginning but it just grows until finally we find out why this person is so upset. powerful!
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by astrangedream | [ Reply to This ]


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