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    dots Submission Name: Spray Paintdots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSpray Paintdots
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    My lips are so close to yours
    passing clouds
    in summer skies
    so crisp
    that dew draws to the surface
    and poses
    like diamond
    ballerinas
    Your breath dances upon my tongue
    and rolls into my throat,
    to taste your words,
    lost goasts
    spacing the floors
    finishing buisness
    in blind bliss
    moist passage into dry times
    finally our souls collapse
    into each other
    flint lips spark
    fires of desire
    wet heat
    seeps deep
    as chills creep
    up concrete spines
    defined and signed
    by
    Loves Graffitti




    Submitted on 2007-03-22 18:36:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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