Paper Yesterday by Twice

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Submission Name: Paper Yesterday dots

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Author:	Twice
Elite Ratio:	4 - 71/82/52
Words:	61

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
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Paper Yesterday dots

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Deep as darkness
I dialate to gather your soul
I taste your thoughts
And swallow them whole
I heat your skin and it melts in my hands
My breath cools you like a Japanese fan
Head on the door
knee's on the floor
I digress
Your picture is cold
And probably old
I'll open again someday

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