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    dots Submission Name: Paper Yesterdaydots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsPaper Yesterdaydots
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    Deep as darkness
    I dialate to gather your soul
    I taste your thoughts
    And swallow them whole
    I heat your skin and it melts in my hands
    My breath cools you like a Japanese fan
    Head on the door
    knee's on the floor
    I digress
    Your picture is cold
    And probably old
    I'll open again someday






    Submitted on 2007-03-22 18:39:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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