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    dots Submission Name: the secret braindots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsthe secret braindots
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    in memory where sleep is perfect
    and more terrible than air,
    the heart has its own weather
    i find odd hours
    glowing treasures to nest

    consider the possibility
    of heaven mixed with wine
    from down here
    how no sun shapes a dazzling bright

    and how everything beneath my skin
    only lives and barely lives
    a box of no roses
    stammering alphabets
    eyes poured out like stones

    the tao is a low whisper coming from a shiny
    button over a child's heart
    the whisper has many names and no name
    beginning with the first letter
    and ending with the same letter
    the name is the sleep of every breath
    and the moon,
    and all light that flashes
    from its surface to its center

    seeking no place, you find a path where
    the grooves are still clean
    wandering with all eyes,
    moist floors of music
    swallow you whole
    it's the old law and new law,
    where waters
    flow from ancient glistering night
    and your own






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      i feel as thou your crawing around my brain at night pulling and drawing out what i thought no one else would ever understand. it's like you've found the taste of green. you must know the way that the world looks like before a thunderstorm. the way that the green glows and it seems like anything is possible. that's what this poem makes think of feel like. the magic of summer storms.

    "seeking no place, you find a path where
    the grooves are still clean
    wandering with all eyes,
    moist floors of music
    swallow you whole
    it's the old law and new law,
    where waters
    flow from ancient glistering night
    and your own"

    pure the posion of thine heart, these ancient wonders to beeseach. i am beloved. and from beloved this disease has sprung from the dark side of the rainbow

    ~shadow
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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