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    dots Submission Name: despite geometrydots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsdespite geometrydots
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    give me your slow blood
    the colour of broken doves
    my faith lay in those lips
    whose lies smell of heaven
    you who go on being born
    despite geometry
    god and the cruel motion
    of stars aimed
    at this thin dime of earth
    in the meat the snow
    is father to a madness that never sleeps
    a loveliness like a thousand miles
    of bad road
    we descend like sad butterflies
    over the wet places
    waiting for the perfume temperature of genius
    drop by drop
    in torched light
    our pretty wings leave dark stains
    muscled on floors of infinite sleep
    there the world lives alone
    in a room full of busted music
    boxes that bump into each other
    shod and crowned with sick flowers
    the sound signs itself into a noose
    gulping tears
    ancestor ratios
    how the mouths we kiss
    drink from our own sweet skulls
    the thoughts we never told each other
    placented bursts of prayer
    scissor the horizon with
    cutouts of thunderfold





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      it's to early to have my mind blown quite like this but it makes my skin crawl in this the most dlightful way. i completly agree with Raphael. i don't think that i could say it any better

    "is father to a madness that never sleeps
    a loveliness like a thousand miles
    of bad road
    we descend like sad butterflies
    over the wet places
    waiting for the perfume temperature of genius
    drop by drop
    in torched light
    our pretty wings leave dark stains "

    what more can i possibly say. decending like sad butterflys. wow
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent,I have no issues with this one at all,once I saw geometry in the title I knew Id have to read it.Its rich in images but I wouldn't say its strange,its abstract though not necessarily crazy.

    give me your slow blood
    the colour of broken doves
    my faith lay in those lips
    whose lies smell of heaven
    you who go on being born
    despite geometry
    god and the cruel motion
    of stars aimed
    at this thin dime of earth

    I loved this,for one you spelled colour the way I do,I'm Irish so I don't spell it the "color" way.

    I looked at the whole poem this way,as describing our little"rock" in space so it was quite interesting,
    Anyway,the whole verse addresses things I think about,why are the cosmos seemingly set up to destroy us,one way or another.Are the lies that smell of heaven a reference to religion?

    I could address the other verses but my comment would be so long it'd be a short essay so ill just say
    that I really enjoyed this one.

    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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