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    dots Submission Name: the brinkdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    All day you walk with a nap
    spine the world
    palm your forehead down
    and every ripple streets a metropolis

    like blood dark in its green bottle
    like earth giving birth
    to cauldron populations
    the way a giraffe
    leans into your dream
    and laughs

    like a gazelle
    flying wet headaches of fire
    out from the trees

    this is precision not process
    the moment when the stars themselves
    finally give out
    and all their angels
    and auras flicker like the end
    of your lost cigarette

    then there will be no real choice
    only a sudden loss of light
    and your secret brain

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      a new child in a new place. bein jaded in the most delightful way. sudden inspiration. no deep love lament in this one? i must admint i enjoy the rage of you talent
    | Posted on 2007-03-31 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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