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    dots Submission Name: whatever desires you mostdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 504
    Average Vote:    3.5000
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    dotswhatever desires you mostdots
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    Often I mistake the opening in my soul
    for a knife
    which is a curse for the insane

    it usually follows after every polite sentence
    and unbuttons the blood on my hip

    it was given to me by the barefooted
    goddess of dice in the space of a kiss
    whose smile tastes like whatever desires you most

    there is no escape

    being amused will haunt you forever, as am I,
    from having survived this wasted body
    and for having loved more than I could.




    Submitted on 2007-03-22 19:37:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So what troubles you so much? Lonesome? Angry? This write seems so sad, and so deep with emotion. I must say though, I really enjoyed this part:

    "It was given to me by the barefooted
    goddess of dice in the space of a kiss
    whos smile tastes like whatever desires you most."

    I would consider re-writing this poem, it seems to have a lot of potential. I am less concerned with odds in the poem than I am with you. So please, feel free to talk to me about anything. I am always here, and could use another friend to talk to about my problems, as well as listen to theirs.

    I hope everything works out for the best with you.

    necrotic
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      So what troubles you so much? Lonesome? Angry? This write seems so sad, and so deep with emotion. I must say though, I really enjoyed this part:

    "It was given to me by the barefooted
    goddess of dice in the space of a kiss
    whos smile tastes like whatever desires you most."

    I would consider re-writing this poem, it seems to have a lot of potential. I am less concerned with odds in the poem than I am with you. So please, feel free to talk to me about anything. I am always here, and could use another friend to talk to about my problems, as well as listen to theirs.

    I hope everything works out for the best with you.

    necrotic
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      i gathered a bit of internal conflict.

    "Often I mistake the opening in my soul
    for a knife
    which is a curse for the insane"

    this "opening" i can relate to as a quality of accepting and loving,
    but with this comes it's consequences,
    the pain.
    choosing to be open,
    has always been an on-going conflict:
    insanity or sheer ingenuity?
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by audrey belle | [ Reply to This ]
      very emotion filled, i liked this because i can definately relate to the line "for having loved more than i could" again amazing write.

    <3 black rose
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      facinating

    "it was given to me by the barefooted
    goddess of dice in the space of a kiss
    whose smile tastes like whatever desires you most "

    i can feel this verse most dearly. some of the others seem a it ambigiouse for my tired mind, but do not take that insult, only as the admittance of ignorance. but the flow and emotion behind it pulls it past what meets the eye and down into what meets the heart

    shadow
    | Posted on 2007-04-01 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. i can relate a little but i don't feel much... mostly pain ...
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by yamifox | [ Reply to This ]


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